Thursday, December 6, 2007

i'm a writer...?

haha...i guess i kinda am...i wrote a song...some of you peeps have seen it...some of you have not...i thought i'd share since i haven't posted anything remotely interesting in a while...you guys can laugh at my lack of writing skills! yay!
it doesn't have a name yet...got any ideas?

Please don't speak...
You've done enough damage
body language speaks louder than words
the unspoken whispers tell me
"Stay away. I am not your friend."
I hurt you and i'm sorry
words cannot express
the pain i feel in mine
for breaking your heart
contradicting words and movements tell the truth.

Please don't speak...
Your dagger sunk deep
into my heart
sweet dagger in my chest
my mind grows weak
my heart grows weaker
made of stone and ice
the prick of your lovely knife
it shatters my cold heart
pieces of me lay in a pile at your feet

but please don't speak...
your deed caused my demise
leave those pieces
i want a new hero
one who will love my brokenness
he'll never, my black knight
no one will put me together
scattered pieces of me will lay in a heap forever
but your scarlet hands don't care
the sweet dagger loves me more than you ever did...

tell me what you think! and help me come up with a catchy name!
C

13 comments:

Anonymous said...

"Truth about the one you trusted"

or

"The betrayal" That one could be construed as cheesy or a cliche

you could call it "please don't speak"

"the dagger of words"

I do not know. Those sound to me a little wordy for a song title, but then again I'm not at all good at this kind of stuff.

After His Heart said...

lol thanks anonymous...i was thinking something like "sweet dagger" i don't know...sounds cheezy...

Marissa said...

lol red dagger!!!!!!!! but thats just me

Anonymous said...

that sounds better than any of mine did.

After His Heart said...

lol...."scarlet dagger"
ohh...this is fun

Marissa said...

ooh i like that one.. bloody dagger.. crimson dagger..

After His Heart said...

we're on a roll baby!

Marissa said...

lol heck yes!! so what are you going to choose????

After His Heart said...

lol....no idea fool...maybe it should be..."untitled..."

Marissa said...

ah im a fool!?!?!? sniff.. lol well that works too

After His Heart said...

lol...not a fool...i was bored and feeling OG haha...kidding

Marissa said...

lol i love how you mock everyone for wanting to be OG then you try it.. lol yuor funny

After His Heart said...

lol yeah thanks...i thought it was funny